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Most women are all familiar Think, girl! How can it be "most" and "all" at the same time! The two are mutually exclusive. with emotional hurts. The damage done to us, or by us, year after year can make us sick. Our pain can be mental pain such as anger, frustration, fear, grief, insecurity, guilt, unbelief, bitterness, abandonment, loneliness, rejection, shame. You need an "and." Women cleave to worry even when God says that He is the bread of life. John 6:35. We will step into a place where ravens have fed us Look at your tenses. You've got past, present, and future in one sentence. and on that step, oil replenishes itself and worry goes into cessation.
The hurt
can be so bad that the distress has caused us to (wordy) fall into addiction, depression,
performance, rebellion, isolation, idolatry, eating issues. These in turn cause
us to move even deeper into sexual/verbal abuse, rage, self-inflicted wounding,
physical ailments, medication addiction, co-dependency, idolatry. You need an "and." They all usually Most stem from root issues even from childhood, or
adolescence. In turn, they manifest into poor coping mechanisms like bad habits,
which only beckon the pain on. This sentence is sounding overblown. Too many overdone
words: manifest, mechanisms, and beckon.
Our pain may
feel like it became part of us when we accepted the impurity whether as a child,
an adolescent or adult. Did it or didn't it become
part of us? Now that we have carried our ache for a while, the pain
buries itself and may make us feel confused trying to remember how it started.
We are overwhelmed as to how to find the origin of the pain. Wordy, wordy paragraph. Condense.
The bondage to our hurt and the confusion or denial to the reason for it is the exact place that the enemy would like us to
stay, a place of defeat and sickness on the devils insert apostrophe cyclical staircase. Psalm 65:2-4 "for you answer our prayers.
All of us must come to you. Though we are overwhelmed by our sins, you forgive them all." How does this tie in to being in
bondage?
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